Vonschlippe's art Reviews on Newgrounds

[hi]

This is great

I love the style of every tiny drawing and the way they flow together. Awesome work, sir.

datamouth responds:

why thank you Vonschlippe.
thanx for the 10 too!

[Kirika-Galaxy]

Yikes!

Hopefully you won't think I'm a troll right off the bat because of the bad grade I gave you; this is my honest opinion about the drawing. All of my other reviews on drawings have been received as fair so far...

I think this drawing died with the background.

Since all the white splotches are equally spread throughout the drawing, there is no focus on whatever's going on in the middle. Basically, you should crop the drawing to around your drawing and that's all. I suggest even getting rid of that obnoxious background.

Everything else about the character itself is rudimentary at best. The anatomy is off; both arms need to be completely re-worked, her torso is not aligned on her hips, and even the wings are very bland and have no structure. There are lots of improvements you should do there before even starting to color.

Keep drawing, but you should do more stuff on paper before attempting CG drawing. I think you slip too easily into cheap automatic effects and filter rape, which removes a lot of the value of your work.

On the plus side, I think your signature is interesting. I should work on my own >_<

DragonPunch responds:

I'm not quitting CG anytime soon, but thanks for the tips. Plus, I think making use of the effects is the best way to use the technology available to me. If I don't use it, I feel like my art is sucking. Again, thanks for the tips. I will definitely go back to the drawing board on this one.

[Mermaid Hair]

Excellent work!

This is great stuff! I like the multiple tones of color on the skin and the way you lit up the scene with blue and white light. The only (picky) criticism I could find for this would be unequal level of detail when looked at full-size, for instance when comparing her eyes to the bottom of the water pillar. Then again, it's quite negligeable! I would love to see you add some grain to the skin and fabric, which I find adds a lot of realism to such renders. Keep up the great work!

AJennyPenny responds:

That's great advice! I'll go ahead and tweak those things. I like the texture idea, and I'll add some more detail. Thanks for the awesome feedback :D

[Underfiiireee]

Neat!

It is quite nice, and it's immediately obvious you spent a lot of time on this piece. The lighting is interesting, the action is definitely intense, and there is a lot of movement going on.

You could improve the composition by adding complexity to the building in the back and making it follow the perspective imposed by the wire fence; that would probably make the action a lot more dramatic. Depending on what painting software you are using, you could also increase the realism of the light and particles with a couple subtle light tricks (screens/outer glows/overlays in PS) or perhaps motion blur.

If you're feeling like a warrior, you could also add smoke to the scene and textures to the clothes! I would really enjoy seeing you revisit this piece some day, or similar pieces to this one. Keep up the good work!

[Dragon geek]

Nice!

I like the comic-book style of the lineart in this illustration! The only detail I can spot that isn't right is the L on his headphones... which are on the right side of his face =P Other than that, kudos!

LeRat responds:

O shit, you're right :'(.

[Pushead Tribute]

:D

Grats on the FP Taiso! You deserve it!!

Taiso responds:

Hehe thanks a lot man, if it wasn't because of your scouting that wouldn't 've happened :D

[Naked Demon]

Yay!

First off, thanks a lot :D

I like the flow and colors in your work! Your lineart is in fact much superior to any of the stuff I tried to do with lineart, so kudos :D It was only natural to scout you, as you are very gifted.

Props!

Taiso responds:

No man, thank you!! and as you might've seen I´m more of a draftsman than a painter...LOL lines seem much more natural to me... I could say the same about how I feel about your coloring skills...they are way much superior of any I've done. So let us both keep progressing, dude!

[floating self-portrait]

Great!

I cannot wait to see more; add more of this and you are an insta-scout for me! (You need 4 pieces minimum to be scouted...)

What really stands out of this work is the choice of colors, which give away a dramatic and cold tone to the picture. It could use some polish in some areas (wall shadow and forehead), however this is negligeable as it may well be a personnal choice. I am a great fan of the shading on the left cheek and around the left eye. There is talent at work here. Keep it up!

Taiso responds:

:D thx man, i really appreciate it, at the time I made this one I didn't have a tablet...but now I do!!! so I think the work might improve in time!! :D thx again!

[Lyndall Jarvis 2]

Very neat

This drawing is pretty nice! You already know its shortcomings so there is no need to point them out; you have a good grasp of drawing hair, but those single, loose hairs on her haid are too hard. You could make them look a lot more realistic by using a slightly softer brush and adding more (but thinner lines). I would also recommend reducing the opacity on your brush in order to have less contrast on the skin in some areas.

Anyhow, you're doing great! Keep it up!

SgtPooter responds:

Thank you for the pointers! i definitely agree, looking at it that the hairs, they could use a softer brush for sure
i appreciate the feedback :)